I’ve been tagged by the fabulous Verna Austen to do the 7/7/7 challenge for my current manuscript.
- Go to page 7 of your WIP (Work in Progress).
- Scroll down to Line 7.
- Share the next 7 sentences in a blog post.
- After the excerpt, tag 7 other writers to continue the challenge.
(So I guess, technically it’s the 7/7/7/7 challenge? The Quad-7 challenge?? The 1/343 challenge? OK, this is why I’m not in charge of naming things.)
My current work in progress is THE NAMELESS QUEEN. Here’s a glimpse:
“Run along, Hat,” I say. “I’ve got an argument to get to.” Ren is behind me, and I know it’s him without checking.
Marcher storms up to us. “That’s my grab.”
Hat scurries off, and I hold my cool until she’s out of sight.
I shake the coin purse at him. “You sent that girl to pickpocket a Royal. That was stupid. There’s no way she would have lifted it without getting caught.”
“You did when you were her age,” Marcher says slyly.
*pretends you’re not counting the sentences* OK, in my defense, I count a line of dialogue + the tag as one sentence.
This scene introduces Marcher, a darker part of MC’s past that won’t stay buried. It also briefly shows Hat (a sort-of-twelve-year-old with excellent hair) and Ren (voice of reason among thieves).
Aaaand, because I’m in an editing mood (when am I not, though?), I’m going to comment on one thing I like and don’t like about my own excerpt.
Like: “You did when you were her age” — This line of dialogue hints at their history without explaining it outright. It’s a decent balance of backstory and action.
Dislike: Ren is behind me, and I know it’s him without checking. — Ehhhh, I don’t like the “know it’s him without checking.” That, plus the passive “is” makes this sentence feel out-of-place, like Ren just suddenly appeared out of The Nothingness of Nowhere. He isn’t super present in this scene even though he’s actually physically present.
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